he is always writing about her, i wonder who she is
scathing critical and hurtful words, he must have loved her once
hell hath no fury like the man scorned,who's used to his own way
when the tables are turned and you realize how little control you actually have...yeah you can def feel burned when used to getting your way...nice story telling through form...
So true. If he loved her once he should still respect her. Fragile, selfish egos can't tolerate losing in anything - especially love. Cool job fitting so much into this form.
That last line has me in stitches, but its so damned true!
ReplyDeleteGorgeous form dont ya think?
Yes I do think! I would love to join a sijo site. Unfortunately one does not exist I don't think.
Deletewhen the tables are turned and you realize how little control you actually have...yeah you can def feel burned when used to getting your way...nice story telling through form...
ReplyDeleteWell that is just too bad for guys like him ~
ReplyDeleteI like the way you broke the thoughts in the lines ~
I do think if a person writes about someone else regularly there is/was caring them. Otherwise he would just let her go..........
ReplyDeleteSo true. If he loved her once he should still respect her. Fragile, selfish egos can't tolerate losing in anything - especially love.
ReplyDeleteCool job fitting so much into this form.
This is a lively twist to what one normally hears of a 'woman scorned' All is fair in love and war another known call relevant here! Nicely Cressida!
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Poor man didn't know what hit him, Cressida?
ReplyDeleteWhat a twist on the stereotypical woman scorned - and the irony that for the protagonist, the woman is almost never absent from his memory.
ReplyDeleteOh yes, bitterness can burn both ways. The sexes aren't so different after all!
ReplyDeleteSmart comment on obsession, both about the subject and the speaker. I like that you used a Sijo to write this poem.
ReplyDeletePerhaps it is just a picture-perfect woman he has dreamed up in his mind.
ReplyDeleteLove that Will pun in the end, very timely, and unfortunately true...
ReplyDeleteOuch! This poem has some punch!
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