Thursday, 9 January 2014

Loss In A Heartbeat

Dverse

In October 2013 Gay Reiser Cannon wrote an excellent article on The Beat Poets and their Poetry. Included in the article was a poem called Chronology by Diane di Prima. The following is my erasure poem based on it.






i loved you in october
rode your shadows in the corners
of the house

in november you invaded
filling the air with dreams
on my inner ear

in december the light failed

now it is january
you slide away on crystal air
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15 comments:

  1. Anonymous9 January 2014 at 13:58

    I'm so glad you told us that it's an erasure poem, because I would never have spotted it otherwise. Very skillfully done, Cressida.

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  2. Laurie Kolp9 January 2014 at 14:23

    I love erasure poetry. You should check out The Found Poetry Review.

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  3. brudberg9 January 2014 at 14:42

    This was so good.. And I can just mirror what tony said.

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  4. Anonymous9 January 2014 at 14:52

    I'm going to have look up "erasure poem!" Even though I'm sure what it means, I really enjoyed your poem. It is so poignant. The single line "in december the light failed" really spoke to me. Thank you for sharing.

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  5. Grace9 January 2014 at 15:32

    I admire the output from the erasure poetry ~ Its tight and progresses very well with the month/seasonal change ~

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  6. Victoria9 January 2014 at 15:44

    Oh, wow. You've done so well to blend the seasons of a relationship to the chosen months. Sadly, years ago,I experience this just as you wrote it...I doubt I'm the only one.

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  7. Anonymous9 January 2014 at 16:29

    really fine pen, Cressida ~

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  8. Anonymous9 January 2014 at 17:17

    yes, love is fleeting, and emotions as fragile as the breeze. A fine poem.

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  9. Bodhirose9 January 2014 at 20:06

    Love this erasure poetry, Cressida...said so much with so few words too...you nailed it!

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  10. Claudia9 January 2014 at 20:57

    it's sad when things start so hopeful and end so quickly...beautiful connection with the months and season

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  11. steph9 January 2014 at 21:15

    Short-lived but passionate as so many love stories are. Nicely done.

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  12. Kathy Reed10 January 2014 at 05:53

    ...you made this so crisp and to the point ..the beat poetry was harder for me than other poems but you make it look so easy...melancholy

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  13. Ron Shields10 January 2014 at 06:34

    each stanza is a gem in this jewel of a poem. the mood and the months are perfectly matched.

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  14. Jeff10 January 2014 at 06:37

    Beautiful work, that last stanza fades away perfectly. And the song choice works wonderfully well with its haunting, sad melody.

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  15. hyperCRYPTICal10 January 2014 at 10:30

    Cleverly done. There are January's for all of us...
    Anna :o]

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