Tuesday, 21 January 2014

Clouds

 Poetry Jam

An erasure poem based on Clouds by Percy Bysshe Shelley.




I laugh
As I pass in thunder
Lightning, my pilot
Lured by the love
of the genii
Leap on the back of an eagle
I bind the Sun's throne
I hang like a roof
I march with hurricane fire and snow
I am the Daughter of Earth and Water


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14 comments:

  1. Peggy21 January 2014 at 21:01

    Lovely recomposition of lines that I assume are taken from Shelly. Neat descriptions of clouds.

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  2. alan170421 January 2014 at 22:25

    This is quite powerful and full of depth. Awesome strength masked in beauty. Very nicely written.

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  3. Sherry Blue Sky22 January 2014 at 00:01

    I LOVE "I am the Daughter of Earth and Water". Oh yes! Perfection!

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  4. Vandana Sharma22 January 2014 at 00:17

    the journey of a cloud well depicted!

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  5. Gabriella22 January 2014 at 01:46

    Very powerful and evocative way of seeing clouds! I enjoyed the energy in your poem.

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  6. The Unknowngnome22 January 2014 at 02:28

    Very majestic. The pic almost as strong as your words.

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  7. Mary22 January 2014 at 03:23

    I feel the confidence and power portrayed in this poem. Enjoyed this.

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  8. Gillena Cox22 January 2014 at 05:30

    This powerful aspect of the genteel looking cloud is amazing; have a nice Wednesday

    much love...

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  9. Unknown22 January 2014 at 06:15

    I like how you took the point of view of the cloud.

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  10. Laurie Kolp22 January 2014 at 06:31

    Lovely erasure!

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  11. Myrna R.23 January 2014 at 10:53

    Beautiful arrangement of Shelly's words. Daughter of earth and clouds - i like that.

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  12. Helen23 January 2014 at 15:12

    I laugh .. I am ... really enjoyed this!

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  13. Susan Lindquist24 January 2014 at 06:56

    I AM ... love the personification and majesty of that declaration ...

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  14. Intelliblog27 January 2014 at 15:27

    Ingenious reworking of poem past.

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