Thursday, 20 October 2011

I Spy


through a window darkly

a buzz cut cutie
excercising on a bike
Shostakovich peals

from the apartment
a vignette to be captured
snapped in a haiku

dark
blue night
voyeuse at work
cautious camera shy
whirr click snapletterie
snap chuckles click squint
snap snort smirk specs
cloud brown irises
snapped dragon
puff puff puffs
chuckle plips
he looks up
caught red
handed
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8 comments:

  1. Beachanny20 October 2011 at 21:08

    Is this a Shostakovich Quintet? I don't know this piece and I LOVED it! And I thought I knew all the great Quintets. It works really well with this. Love the interplay with the alliteration. I smirked and smiled too - ha..."caught red handed". Great word play!

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  2. Anonymous20 October 2011 at 21:13

    Your crisp language is well accompanied by the video clip. I especially appreciated the inclusion of voyeuse.

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  3. Claudia20 October 2011 at 21:57

    oh i like..this is a poem i would love to hear read aloud with all these sounds..made my tongue move unconsciously while reading...fine work.

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  4. Cressida de Nova21 October 2011 at 01:00

    T'is indeed Annie and a brilliant performance.
    I love it too!

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  5. Brian Miller21 October 2011 at 04:54

    nice use of sound. it makes this a fun poem and i catch a bit of a shape there? some nice word play as well.

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  6. Jeff21 October 2011 at 07:29

    I think he knew you were there all along. It is high ambition to be poet's fodder.

    I have not read you before. I must correct that.

    Cheers!

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  7. Cressida de Nova21 October 2011 at 09:44

    Thank you all for your generous comments.

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  8. Sheila21 October 2011 at 21:35

    very wonderful.

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