Monday, 1 July 2013

Cascade





messing about in boats
to the soft lilt lapping of  waves
the seagulls stand to attention
on a white sandy cove near a bay

it's the very best part of the week
men scraping and painting away
in the salt and sea blown breeze
messing about in boats

she stares wistfully at the horizon
listening to the siren call
dives quietly into the sea
to the soft lilt lapping of waves

squints at the lowering sun
glinting on the yacht sail masts
the fleet is coming home at dusk
the seagulls stand to attention


wrapping herself in a towel
she half expects to see him there
remembers this is no longer home
on a white sandy cove near a bay







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17 comments:

  1. grapeling2 July 2013 at 06:51

    what an interesting structure, and beautifully executed.

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  2. Brian Miller2 July 2013 at 13:52

    a bit of a sad emotional touch in the end...nicely done on the form and repetition...it is the best of the day to sit and listen to the gulls and waves...and even the everyday sound of men working and such...

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  3. Waltermarks2 July 2013 at 15:53

    Nice imagery. It flows very well. Thanks

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  4. kaykuala2 July 2013 at 17:27

    Wonderful cascades Cressida! The resultant posting gives a poignant picture of a love on hold! Great take!

    Hank

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  5. Tracy Kuhn Greenlee2 July 2013 at 18:53

    i have waited and hoped myself... you captured such a moment...thank you.

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  6. Sharp Little Pencil3 July 2013 at 16:33

    I loved your alliteration, the sound of everyday workers, and most of all, the "lilt-lapping of waves." A gentle portrait of one of those moments on one of those days that makes an impression for life. Cressida, I loved this! Amy

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  7. Heidi3 July 2013 at 19:46

    Excellent use of form and imagery (cascade for a sea setting? too cool). The images and the form are well woven together and the result is lovely.

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  8. Cressida de Nova4 July 2013 at 21:33

    Thank you everyone for your comments.

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    1. Brian Miller7 July 2013 at 19:29

      aw shucks, your welcome ma'am
      smiles.

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    2. Cressida de Nova7 July 2013 at 19:33

      Why are you being nice to me? It is making me nervous:)

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  9. TALON7 July 2013 at 18:55

    So gentle and full of equal measure of hope and despair. I totally enjoyed this writing. :)

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  10. Anonymous7 July 2013 at 19:34

    You painted a beautiful picture here.

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  11. Paul Andrew Russell7 July 2013 at 22:29

    What a beautiful piece of writing. :-)

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  12. Mary8 July 2013 at 04:06

    Beautiful. I can visualize the scene you painted with your words!

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  13. Anonymous8 July 2013 at 05:37

    Impressive form and gorgeous imagery =)

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